American Haiku


Toshi Kurete,

Counting the hours till the new year

remembering the tough times.

 

Dave Barber

11 December 2008

Putting away ornaments,

my heart sinks finding

broken ancient pieces.

 

Dave

I just wanted to pass on how much I appreciate every visit!  Thank you!  You guys are great.  I read each post.  Feel free to share your heart.  As Christmas arrives on our door,   I extend a Merry Christmas to all!    It’s  not too late to download this book as an e-book from Alibris.  

 

                        thanks again,

 

                      Dave

Friends 1

 

Mark said  I should know better.

from Arkansas, he was a hard line

without compromise,

a facing rock with only sharp edges.

 

11 Dec 08

Dave Barber

 

Friends 2

Jef is a  diamond,

shining and bright

among the dimness.

 

14 Dec 08

 

 

Haiku Restaurant

 

Pesole and beans

across a arange sun table

sounds of satisfaction.

After reading an article on good/bad poetry,  I have to admit a bit of confusion.   I’ve read some current poetry that was just plain vulgar but was treated as great and I’ve read some great poets that couldn’t get out of the starting gate.  So what is it that makes one verse a devine inspiration and the next one crap?  Is it like a painting?  The beauty of a poem is what it brings out in you?  The emotions, connections, memories, thoughts?  To me, that’s the connection.  Each of these poems on this blog are the result of an event, poem, thought or realization that occurred.  I’ve shared them with the hope that they will mean something to you as they do to me.   And the response is positive, 95% of the time.  Sure there are nickpickers – word over that word, or form, sure I make mistakes.  But in general, they are heart poems.  

So, my poetry is ideas, thoughts, and day’s events in verse.  Sometimes a painful place I’ve been.    Sometimes, they are typed quickly before the muse grows tired and leaves.  Sometimes they are started and finished later.   I’ve read that good poets write, let them set for months and come back to them.  Maybe that’s my problem – with a few exceptions, they hit this blog right after they leave my muse.

Elements of bad poetry?  Well according to Mike Chasar*, they are predictable rhymes, figures of speech, predictable tropes and sonnet form.   I’m guilty of some of them.  He’s suggestion of a writer’s toolbox – set forms to write in and formulas is foreign to me.  I write as I  write – form happens as the poem happens.  I don’t necessarily write to one form.  But Mike’s point was that deadline poetry (that poetry written against a deadline) requires a faster draw, an ability to pull together form, timing, content in mere hours.   I have to admit,  I’ve participated in challenges but I don’t always feel this produces the best poetry.

I’d be curious what you guys think of this idea.

 

Dave Barber

19 December 2008

* Mike Chasar wrote the article in “Poets and Writer’s” magazine, Nov/Dec 2008, page 39 “Writing good bad poetry”

Returning from the store

packages filling her arms

she realized she missed someone!

 

Dave Barber

17 Dec 08

It’s almost christmas!  Order your copy of “Where the Fence Line runs now so it will be under the tree in time for the holiday-tree-safetyHolidays!

 

Dave

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